My favorite sport
There are much kinds of sports 。So as swimming, running and dancing. However, the sport what I like most is basketball. When I was in Great five，I started to play basketball in school. At that time, I found I had loved this sport deep.Now, I would like to watch basketball games as much as possible . The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
My favorite basketballplayer is Yao Ming. becau Ilike to watch basketball games. Yao is one of the best basketball player in China. so he can keeps his legs in NBA, becau of his wonderful acting, more and more foreigners start to notice him now. As we know Yao is very tall,,SowecaneYao’s splendid performance. Yao is a kind hearted man.
I like him. I like basketball.
分析：這是一篇敘述自己愛好和最喜愛的體育明星的作文。學(xué)生的語法點(diǎn)出現(xiàn)了幾個(gè)小錯(cuò)誤。
1. muchkindsof 是指不可數(shù)名詞的許多種類，此處的sports是可數(shù)名詞。故要用 many kinds of sports.
2. So as swimming 改為 Such as swimming, 作者是說例如,短語such as 才是例如的意思。
3. the sport what I like most is basketball中，先行詞是the sport , 關(guān)系代詞用that而不是What.
4. I found I had loved this sport deep中，deep是形容詞，應(yīng)改成副詞，深深地deeply。這句話可譯成，我發(fā)現(xiàn)，我已經(jīng)深深地喜歡上了這個(gè)運(yùn)動(dòng)！
5. Yao is one of the best basketball player in China.這句話中，player 要用復(fù)數(shù)players. One of 短語中的名詞使用復(fù)數(shù)形式。
6. so he can keeps his legs in NBA。這句話中can 后邊要加上動(dòng)詞原形。故 he can keep his legs in NBA.
修改后的作文
My favorite sport
There are many kinds ofsports 。Such as swimming, running and dancing. However, the sport that I like most is basketball. When I was in Great Six， I started to playbasketball in school. At that time, I found I had loved this sportdeeply.Now I would like to watch basketball games as many as possible. The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
